Exercise 1: Formal Writing

I believe that having enough hours of sleep is really important for our minds because it keeps us alive and energetic to learn new things and gives us the energy that we will be using to think and analyze in every situation that we encounter. It helps us to think clearly and positively, and we don’t easily get weary when it comes to solving our problems. We seem to become more productive when we had enough sleep compared to when we didn’t have enough of it. But is it really the resting state that contributes to our good performance or is it the dreaming part that really works?

Revised:

People tend to become more alive and energetic to learn new things and be more effective when it comes to analyzing every situation if enough hours of sleep have been acquired to rest persons’ minds and bodies. It helps people to think clearly and positively without being weary when it comes to solving personal problems. One seems to become more productive when the recommended hours of sleep has been met compared to when a person failed to comply with it. But, is it really the resting state that contributes to a person’s good performance or is it the dreaming part that really works?